Week #4

The revision strategy I found most useful this week was receiving comments from my classmates and from Stephanie. This was most useful because I felt like my structure and everything else was good and I just wanted to work on the flow. Based on the qualities of an exemplary narrative we wrote today, I feel like my narrative is hitting most of the things we covered. This weekend I want to revise all of Stephanie's comments by adding more information to certain parts of my narrative.

I feel like the writing norms we have set for class have been working pretty well. I like the quiet, but I still would rather have a little background music because listening to my Ipod is too distracting.

Out of all of the questions Stephanie listed for potential arguments, I feel most passionate about what San Diego can do to help the homeless community. The reason I am passionate about this topic is because my grandma is in charge of a church where she facilitates a lot of volunteering for homeless people. I participate in almost all of the events she plans and am very involved in it.

Week #3

The current book I am reading is The Lord of the Rings: Part One. So far I love it. I guess the part I'm struggling with is that I'm a slow reader so I have a lot of catching up to do before the 25th. I love this book so much and I can't wait to start reading the others as well. It suites me well because I love everything fantasy related, so reading about a different world is enjoyable. The way I am planning on sharing the book with the class is by doing a Goodreads review.

I chose to write about horseback riding for my narrative topic because it is a big aspect of my life. My narrative takes place at Camp Strawderman which is a camp I go to every summer for the whole summer. It is literally my summertime home which is a reason I'm so passionate about writing about it. Because its something I really love, I think that the structure of the story flows really well. One thing I think I might need help with is that everything's in the right order but it still seems sort of choppy.. maybe its missing more of myself in it? I'm not sure what its missing but it's missing something.

Week #2

I took away from our discussion of Pygmalion and My Fair Lady that there are many different views on what perfect language is and whether or not Professor Higgins helped Eliza or not. I believe that perfect language doesn't exist, because if everybody talked the same nobody would have personality behind what they say. I also do think that Professor Higgins did help Eliza because now she is actually accepted in society while she wasn't before.